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    how can i move forward, when the fingerprints of my insecurities are still lingering within my chest, pressing against my ribs like piano keys? i am just waiting, for the day, when the saddest parts of me are overcome with songs of serenity.
I'm waiting for that day...
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Vallestin Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful, no one know can make insecurities so damn pretty
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014
Your words are so very beautiful and these are also words that I can relate to. I'm waiting for that day too...:heart:
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank-you so much, hun! :heart:
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NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014
You're very much welcome! :D
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013
:blackrose: Your lovely poetry has been featured here: fav.me/d6ogtjc
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank-you so much, that means a lot! :heart:
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lkay557 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013  Student Writer
so beautiful i love the way u wrote this.
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank-you hun! :heart:
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MichelleShannon Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2013  Student General Artist
This is beautiful. I dig the imagery in the last three lines ^_^
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank-you so much :heart:!
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ssensory Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013   Writer
I know that you usually drop the caps on 'I' in your poetry, but it really, really works here. It shows that the speaker deems him/herself to be unimportant, and really shows throughout the rest of the poem, too; especially in lines 2 and 6. Another part of your formatting that really works is how it's in italics. It gives it the sort of breath/dream kind of feel off, and that's exactly what it feels like. Also, the shortness of this poem really adds to the breath/dream thing and also the unimportant-ness. Breath/dream because it's so short - just like a simple breath or dream. Unimportant-like because of the brevity, as if this was all the person thought that this feeling deserved.

This poem comes off as kind of like breathing - an exasperated sigh. Something so many people have felt when they're down. This poem hits people hard - I can tell by the comments but also by the poem. It's so relate-able and the imagery is so vivid that it's hard to ignore the truthfulness of this poem. 

So, I have a few suggestions for the poem (which you may feel free to disagree with and ignore). 
1) Remove the comma in the middle of line 5. It gives off an unnecessary pause, in my opinion.
2) Remove the 'just' in line five because it's a filler word. I see how it works, but it also doesn't, in my opinion. (seriously, ignore this one if you want to because it's a pet peeve of mine to see filler words in poetry)
3) Line three is in passive voice, I think. I suggest to remove the 'are' and 'still' and the -ing off of lingering if you wish to keep the poem in active voice. However, I personally would not change the line due to passive vs. active voice, because it really works for the poem and gives off a better impact. 
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DreamVulture Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Great work! Short & Sweet
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love this poem's strongly emotive melancholy. I can understand how the protagonist is suffering from a sense of dismal disarray, honestly speaking.

Personally, the contrast provided using piano keys and the insecurities holding onto you is evocative and gives is very intense portrayal of what is going through that protagonist's mind. Its as if the protagonist, even though she has let her last ghost go and freed it from her protection, Those ghosts come back to haunt her... constantly reminding her of the reality of her predicament... her lingering illusions.
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art-affinity Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
always so wonderful to read your work. :)
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
perfect, every single word in this is perfect
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It means a lot that you think this is 'perfect'! Thank-you! :heart: :tighthug:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah-mazing. The imagery in this is just gorgeous.
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: Thank-you, that really means a lot that you said that! :heart:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :heart:
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half-pixieman Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Student Writer
Beautiful. I am waiting too...
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank-you, :heart: I hope you don't wait to long.
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Um-fromumbridge Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013
Excellent !!
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad that you think so! Thank-you for taking the time to comment. :heart:
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Um-fromumbridge Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013
:blowkiss: your welcome, I look forward to looking through your work
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013   Writer
Beautiful.
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank-you :heart:!
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introverted-ghost Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013   Writer
You are most welcome. :tighthug:
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flummo Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Writer
Featured. :heart: [link]
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: Thank-you so much, lovely! It means a lot. :heart:
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preferablysydne Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013
i love this so much.
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank-you! :heart:
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"fingerprints of my insecurities"
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"pressing against my ribs like piano keys?"

jumped at me, when I read it..and it's a beautiful way of descibing that feeling. Job very well done. <3

And like others, I also really enjoyed the ending "songs of serenity" seemed a very fitting ending for this.
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad that those lines jumped out at you, and that you found the ending fitting. It means a lot that you took the time to read and comment, thank-you! :heart:
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SteffenC-itsjustme Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It was my pleasure :)
We are a community, after all, and should be there for each other. <3
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battlebrothertherix Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I feel like this today...
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:

I hate feeling this way, so I hope you are okay.
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sacredZinja Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very touching! A bit like a glimpse of that serenity already... Just not sure yet...
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank-you so much! :tighthug:
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Lady-Yume Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013   Writer
This is simply beautiful, love :heart: Instant :+fav:!
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thank-you beautiful! :heart:
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Kinglorshi Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Student Writer
Nice imagery and is a relatable theme. If there are issues, I hope they are resolved.
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
One day at a time. With each day I can faintly hear that song, it has taken a while, but I'm so much happier with myself then I was a year ago. Thank-you so much for the comment, it means a lot that you took the time :heart:
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Kinglorshi Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Student Writer
No problem, anytime.
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Nelinde Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is well written and relatable. Well done.
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug: Thank-you!
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Nelinde Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are most welcome! :dance:
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brokenfragilethings Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"i am just waiting, for the day,
when the saddest parts of me
are overcome with songs of serenity."

That's such a relatable thing, you know?
It was sort of like a kick to the gut reading that, and not in a bad way or anything!
Just like, it was very powerful.

A lot of people just want the sadness they feel
to get filled with something else, and it was just a lovely play on words,
and figuring out how to phrase it.

I also love the diction! This is a lovely piece.
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It took me a while to figure out how to phrase it, and I'm quite happy with how I decided to in the end. The fact that you found it powerful means that I got the message across, so that's good :) Thank-you so much for taking the time to comment, lovely! :heart:
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brokenfragilethings Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Anytime, dearest! This was such a lovely read, and yes, I think you did a wonderful job!
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